Coach de roteiro: converse sobre o seu próprio roteiro

Partly. We understand where Walt starts (duty to strangers) and the pressure on him (Claire's "And never once for us"), but the turn happens in one line, and he says it out loud: "Tonight... for the first time, I want it to go dark." That's the arc stated, not dramatized. He gives up forty years with almost no resistance, so the change feels cheap.

Meanwhile he keeps polishing while saying he wants it dark. That contradiction is your best material, but the dialogue flattens it.

The ship's light is a strong final image, but its meaning is unclear: is it the test that pulls him back, or just atmosphere? Right now we can't tell which way Walt goes.

Options:

• Let action carry the turn. Cut the stated line. Instead:
  CLAIRE: Then let it. Come home.
  Walt stops polishing. Sets the cloth down. Then he sees it: a ship's light, far out. His hand drifts back to the lens.
  Now the arc is a choice we watch him struggle with.

• Give him resistance first. Before he softens, let him push back: "Somebody's always out there, Claire." Then her line lands harder, and any shift costs him something.

• Decide what the ship means. If this is the end, let his last action answer it (lamp on or off). If it's early in the film, the ship can be the hook that keeps him from leaving.

Which is it: the opening or the ending?